AAOOOSC!: The Mission - Comments, page 6

@A Shruinger
Well, I like his character's ideas! Go Tavy, you rock!! But I'm bummed about no Kazer...but I hope it's good Kazer!! Right now I'm in love with them saving each other or falling in love or something! :P

@EvelynaKitty
Ahhh, I see, okay, cool! :DDD Yea, John looks like the smart-type of guy. And his smartness will play a pretty major role in this story! ;)
For now, no, but later on, Kazer will come back! 8D
Yea! That's true! :)))

@A Shruinger
I just think he's funny because of his attitude and how he talks. I'm getting like a smart hockey player from Harvard type vibe, like anti-Seggy. :P
It's okay...but man....no Kazer.... :(
Yeah, It's difficult to do humor, but it's kinda easy with hockey because it's players/people you know in different situations. :)

@EvelynaKitty
Yay! :DD I'm glad you say that he's funny! But I'm curious of why you say he's funny... Yea, he has the Islanders' power, which is to manipulate weather (atmokinesis); and yup, John has a lot of back stories...one more to come in this story ;)
I'm sorry... 8(
YAY!!! :D Yea, most of this story is full of improv--I just have an outline for me to know what's gonna happen in the scenes and that's it. But that's great that it made you laugh! :D This story is suppose to have humour in it, but I don't make it funny on purpose--I just let it come natural ;)

@A Shruinger
Tavy's hilarious!!!! And I love his story and the fact that he can manipulate weather!!!! XDDDD
8(((((((((((((((((( *lip quivers*
Wow, I love the improv though. But yes, haha it made me laugh! ;)

@EvelynaKitty
Hahahaa, thank you! :D See, John IS AWESOME! :DDD Hahaha! XD
Noooo...he doesn't really like Kaner at the moment... Yea, sorry, Kazer is broken apart here...for now ;)
YAY!!! :DDD You like that argument! :DD XDDD That was all improvsed, no joke! But thank you! :DDD
John is awesome! :DDD

AHHHHH!!!! Another great update! I LOVE TAVY!!! (As he would say, "Tough, I'm gonna call him that!") :D
TAZER DIDN'T GO BACK OR QUESTION SAVING KANER!!!!!!! NOOOOOOO!!!!! The Kazer??!! It hurts...it really hurts....no Kazer at all....oh..... :(
I loved the argument about Jonathan though. "When I'm mad, Jonathan!" and Jonny's all happy :P

@EvelynaKitty
Oh yes, Kari is evil! X)
Yup! I also have to wait a week to put it out! XD I hadn't even typed it yet but chances are that I'll type it tomorrow during lunch ;) But it'll be up before you know it! ;) Hahaha, I like your Sid movement! XD
Alright, cool! Tell me when you fixed it all! :D

@A Shruinger
Okay. I understand. I like Kari's villainy though...nice.
Oooohhhhhhh.....man I wanna read the next chapter now....but I'm gonna have to wait for next weekend though!!!! :O *folds arms and pouts like a little kid or Sid*
I'm looking at Peekaboo right now. I'm gonna figure out this "Jamie's horns" and "crystal ball thing".... :D

@EvelynaKitty
Yea, I knew it was predictable that Sid was gonna save Nathan because I mean...what is the other option? Nathan can't die! But yea, it's fine if it's predictable--it was just to show how Sid and Nathan escape ;) But I'm glad you like it! :D And trust me, next chapter is NOT gonna be that predictable at all ;)))
Hahahaaa, yea Kaner... That's why he's not a captain! XD

Oh man...that was super close. I think it should have been a little bit closer, it was kind of predictable that Sid was gonna save Nathan, I mean that's okay. But maybe make it so that it's much closer of a rescue. Much more daring, so to say. But I like it!!
And then there's Kanerboo....such a failure at being a leader....it's why you are Jonny's "partner" XDDDDD

@EvelynaKitty
I only watched the 2nd quarter since I was on the road for the first and I needed to type up this chapter for the second half. Thanks God I didn't waste my time seeing my team lose :P
Hahahaa! XDD Sid, is that you‽ XDD Yea, I can't let Kaner save his buddy THAT easily! ;)
A ton‽ Oh man, I'll read over it again...and fix those issues :PPP At least it was understandable! XD
Thank you! :D Oh course you can't! ;) Alright, I'll go over to the messages now! :DDD

HAHA Patriots won!! :DD Good game though, your team almost had the win! "Almost" ;)
Anyway, OH MY BUBBIES!! I knew that Kanerboo wouldn't succeed...silly little blondie...this is why you aren't a leader. I mean you are in Peekaboo, but not doing a very good job. Way to "save" Jonny and the NHL there, bud. ;)
There are a ton of grammatical issues, but just reread it and make the changes...but I could understand it, so it wasn't horrible. I understand the rush and tiredness though. But just go back over it again. :D
Awesome action-filled chapter and love the Kazer in danger peril. Can't wait for Kinny-Sid! :) (Oh and I think I know who is gonna save 'em, but I'll reveal my guess through the messages) :)

@A Shruinger
Heehee. Sorry. :P I didn't say that anyone was gonna die.......but I'll wait...patiently...but eagerly.

@EvelynaKitty
HEEEEEEEYYYY!!! Don't. Say. Anything--anyone can read this... 8|||| X( I cannot tell you, because I don't wanna spoil anything. SHHHHHHHHHHHHH! Buuuuuut, let me say this: NO ONE dies in AAOOOSC! Nooooooo oneeeeeee!

@A Shruinger
IS THIS WHERE SID'S GONNA GET CONTROLLED AND TRY TO CHOP KINNY'S HEAD OFF?? :P Man, I wanna know...it's killing me.
Yay!
I know, I know...ugh.... :P

@EvelynaKitty
Yea, Sid's not like Kanerboo XD But you'll see how it turns out with Nathan and Sid ;)
Alright, fixed it! And some other errors I found in there ;)
Patience, my friend... ;)

@A Shruinger
I like Sid saving Nathan though. That's better for me ;) After knowing Sid...I just can't see him like Kanerboo or Kinny or Nichy...BUT he is behaving so far, so that is good. ;) (Better behaved than Perry...)
For present tense all of the verbs would be in the present case. So instead of "turned" it would be "turns". "Was" would be "is". :D
TOO LONG!!!! AHHHHHHH!!!! No, no, that's fine. I understand. :P

@EvelynaKitty
Yay, I'm glad you like it! :DDD And that you think that the action's good! :))) Thaaaank you for the awesome comment! :D Made my night :))
Hahaha, yes, Brad can fight with a gun XD And yea, Nathan and Sid have to get into trouble sometime! ;)
But for the tense, to make it present tense, does ALL the verbs turn into present tense or...? I want the tense to be correct :)
Yes, yes, more'll be coming up next weekend ;)))

"Okay, guys, change of plan!" Patrick shouts hastily. "You guys have to fight those army dudes--" He points to the army on land that was getting closer to them. "--while I save Toews and I'll have to fight whoever's in there by myself."
Oh....Kanerboo...bad idea.
I LOVE MARCHY!! Go HONEY BADGER GO!! :P
The action was AWESOME!! It's MUCH BETTER!! The tense did shift, but that is okay...it's fixable. I love this though...
KINNY NO!!!!!!!!!!!!! Let him go Lundqvist you meanie!! (*cough* Asshole *cough*) >:(
MOREEEEEE!!!!!!! I crave it...I can't stand waiting, man. :)