A Favor for a Friend - Comments, page 3

I'm reading! I love this story!

I'm still reading...

Poor Olli.

Love. Can't wait for the next update(:

poor olli but I get what she is saying with him not paying for her education.

Poor Olli

Awww I like it !!!

@A Shruinger

Thank you! I hate writing in third person, I like putting every single thought in and with the main character. I just didn't think it would be as hard to get Olli's thoughts across. I mean its kind of obvious but you don't really get the full extend plus there are his personal issues with it that I wanted to make known.

Well, if you don't like switching from one POV to another, you can just write it in thrid person so that the narrotator can jump from one person's thoughts to another, but I believe it's a bit too late to do that... But next time you can try it out! (Just to let you know, I do NOT like writing in third person, so I understand if you deny my suggestion ;)
Anyways, your story's getting better every chapter! Love it! :D

good post

great job...
now I have lion king music stuck in my head... (oh I just can't wait to be king!!!)

So cute... Olli and Aliyah

Love it ! Really like how she is getting annoyed that they all think her advice is amazing

@Akuna-Ma-Maatta
Awwww. :) You're welcome!

@A Shruinger
Just did about a minute ago lol :) glad you like it. Means a lot to me.

I love it so far! Please update it!

nice

I'm definitely curious about this story