Haunting Hallucinations - Comments

How awesomely evil is Jonathan Drouin??!! Haha! He's EVIL! Sid trained him! ;)

I get what you mean, and it isn't harsh. Not at all. I like this feedback. I'd rather receive this type of "feedback" then none. I like it when people point something out that I need to change. ;) Thank you and I went ahead and changed it a little, so feel free to check it out and see if it works now. I didn't like Landy jumping to the conclusion of Jo, so I instead tweaked the conversation. See if it works? :P
Iggy doing drugs is Jo's "excuse".

@EvelynaKitty
Well, I said that because it can be like the first thing and the reader can be like confused at what was happening, but then when they read that Jo is mad at Nathan and Nathan and Val find out why they are hallucinating, then the reader can be like, "OHHH!!! That's was what the beginning was about! Jo being evil! I get it!" But if you don't want to do that (which I totally understand why), you can not let Nathan and Val know why they are hallucinating until like after they are done with their therapy sessions. It just doesn't make sense for them to just all of a sudden find out right after that scene of Jo being evil and then they just randomly go to a mental hospital place because they've been practically drugged. They should go to that place because they think that they have mental issues--they shouldn't be going there if they know that it's not their fault that they have hallucinations, it's just the drug's fault. And the hallucinations should've worn off if they only drank the water with the drug by now...
Sorry if this sounds harsh :P Just trying to help you out! :)
But what would be the purpose of Iggy taking drugs?

@A Shruinger
Well, why do you think that it would make more sense to have it be at the beginning of the story? And I get what you mean about them finding out though...but I'm not quite sure how else to do that part? I did re-read it and I am currently trying to fix the "quickness" or it. I don't like it, but what about Iggy doing drugs?? :P

Wow, I would've knew had guessed that Jo was the reason why they were having hallucinations. But I think that for suspense that you should've put Jo's part of him being evil at the WAAAY beginning of this story. It seemed like Jo's part and the figuring out of the reason behind the hallucinations was just way too easy for the characters and that they should've figure out the reason behind the hallucinations after they go to the mental hospital thing... Just my thoughts, so yea :) But nice reason why they were having hallucinations ;)

@EvelynaKitty
Alright, that's good to know! Ooo...so Jo IS gonna be the villain! This is gonna be good! Awesome, I need to know how he looks like! ;)

@A Shruinger
The "Sid thing" will make sense soon. I promise. :D After this though, I looked at the outline, it's going to get even more awkward...The psychologist part is coming up. Oh and I'm going to add Jo to the cast. He's my main villain! :D

@EvelynaKitty
Yes! I can't wait to find out about the reason why Nathan and Val are having those hallucinations! :D I can't wait for that POV either! :DDDD This is getting good!!!
But wait, wouldn't Nathan think of Sid weirdly since he's having hallucinations of him? It seems like he's picturing Sid perfectly fine even though he's in the same rink as him...

@A Shruinger
I thought people in general might like that Jo and Nathan are having problems. It was the perfect idea and reason behind the hallucinations!! Wait until I get Jo POV up here in the next chapter on Tuesday/Weds...it's some messed up stuff man....and I can only say, poor, poor, poor Valeri.... :(

I like these typed of plots when friends go against each other! X))) Oh yes!!! :D

Oh like what I did with D&T - Peyton and Dimitri. I am considering possibly transforming this into an original concept! :)
I know...heeheehee...
I have the rough draft chapter of Peekaboo up, by the way... :) I just finished it!

Same here, I love that type of stuff! That's why I know about this stuff! :DD Wait, but what original names are you talking about in the Notes section?
But poor Tyler... I'm sorry, that's a terrible thing to happen to anyone 8|

:DDDDDD Yay for having help and learning things!!!! :)

@EvelynaKitty
Alright, that's fine! Ask me anytime! ;) Glad I can help!!! :D

@A Shruinger
Okay! Thanks!!!! I will! I will definitely be relying on you for this story and the ideas involved in it!! ;)

@EvelynaKitty
Yea, just replace demons with hallucinations for the chapter! ;) Feel free to ask me more about hallucinations or other stuff like that--it's very interesting! ;) You are welcome! :D

Cool, so I can leave the chapter up and it makes sense and works with the hallucination idea then?! Sick! Thanks again!! ;)

You are very welcome! :))) Yes, hallucinations work PERFECTLY for this chapter, since you can either see, hear, touch, smell, or/and taste 'em ;) Good, good! :)

Ok, I think I am following you. *gasp* Okay!!!!! Yes you are right, that is exactly what I am thinking of! Thank you for giving me the word I have been searching for! Yes! Hallucinations is right. That is what Val is experiencing!
So with the hallucinations in mind, does the chapter work????

No, no, no, no, no, hallucinations are not possessing someone, they're just...well, let me give you the definition: 'a sensory experience of something that does not exist outside the mind.' They are visual and audio hallucinations that I know of... What I'm getting from the story is that Val is having hallucinations since he's seeing things that aren't there and also hearing things that he only hears. Do you understand? :|