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Haunting Hallucinations

Summary

Valeri Nichushkin feels home-sick, even though he is well into his second season. He is also being haunted by inner demons. He is highly depressed and Sergei Gonchar has officially retired, due to his age and a sudden concussion injury, suffered during a Dallas-Minnesota game. (Matt Cooke hit him.) Val misses his fellow Russian and it makes him spiral downward on the ice, quickly. Jamie and Tyler try to help him out, but are unable to.

Meanwhile, Nathan MacKinnon is haunted by terrorizing dreams as well and he is to the point where he can't stand it anymore and jeopardizes his life and career on the ice, by dropping the gloves with known-goon Raffi Torres of the San Jose Sharks. His teammates and captain, Gabriel Landeskog try to help him out, but fail.

The next game, versus the Dallas Stars, he meets up with the young Russian player and at first, they aren't comfortable with one another, but they finally warm up and help one another out with their problems and issues. And soon they make friends of one another.

But they also agree that they need to seek out professional help from a highly praise psychologist. However she is also seeing another patient, a Chicago Blackhawk centre, and she has a bit of a crush on hunky hockey players. She wants this Blackhawk, but she also meets "Kinny" and "Nichy", falling in love with their personalities.

Can she help them get back to their superstar form or will she fall for all three and not help them out at all?


**Lower PG-13 for some strong themes and depression and implied sexual behavior, it's not too heavy, but it is PG-13 I guess...



Characters

Dolphiana "Dolphi" Caffrey

Dolphiana "Dolphi" Caffrey

A clinical psychologist/shrink that helps out Kinny and Nichy with their problems and more....

Gabriel Landeskog "Landy"

Gabriel Landeskog "Landy"

Nathan's Teammate

Jaydrien Caffrey

Jaydrien Caffrey

Dolphi's other patient and future boyfriend; he is a Chicago Blackhawk

Jonathan Drouin

Jonathan Drouin

"Jo" - The main villain of this bizarre story

Nathan MacKinnon

Nathan MacKinnon

Colorado Avalanche Sophomore

Patrick Kane and Jonathan Toews

Patrick Kane and Jonathan Toews

Makes a brief appearance together, as two of Dolphi's clients

Tyler Seguin and Jamie Benn

Tyler Seguin and Jamie Benn

Val's Teammates, who attempt to help him out with Sergei's Retirement

Valeri "Val" Nichushkin

Valeri "Val" Nichushkin

Dallas Stars Sophomore

Chapters

Comments

How awesomely evil is Jonathan Drouin??!! Haha! He's EVIL! Sid trained him! ;)

EvelynaKitty EvelynaKitty
11/4/14

I get what you mean, and it isn't harsh. Not at all. I like this feedback. I'd rather receive this type of "feedback" then none. I like it when people point something out that I need to change. ;) Thank you and I went ahead and changed it a little, so feel free to check it out and see if it works now. I didn't like Landy jumping to the conclusion of Jo, so I instead tweaked the conversation. See if it works? :P
Iggy doing drugs is Jo's "excuse".

EvelynaKitty EvelynaKitty
10/16/14

@EvelynaKitty
Well, I said that because it can be like the first thing and the reader can be like confused at what was happening, but then when they read that Jo is mad at Nathan and Nathan and Val find out why they are hallucinating, then the reader can be like, "OHHH!!! That's was what the beginning was about! Jo being evil! I get it!" But if you don't want to do that (which I totally understand why), you can not let Nathan and Val know why they are hallucinating until like after they are done with their therapy sessions. It just doesn't make sense for them to just all of a sudden find out right after that scene of Jo being evil and then they just randomly go to a mental hospital place because they've been practically drugged. They should go to that place because they think that they have mental issues--they shouldn't be going there if they know that it's not their fault that they have hallucinations, it's just the drug's fault. And the hallucinations should've worn off if they only drank the water with the drug by now...
Sorry if this sounds harsh :P Just trying to help you out! :)
But what would be the purpose of Iggy taking drugs?

A Shruinger A Shruinger
10/16/14

@A Shruinger
Well, why do you think that it would make more sense to have it be at the beginning of the story? And I get what you mean about them finding out though...but I'm not quite sure how else to do that part? I did re-read it and I am currently trying to fix the "quickness" or it. I don't like it, but what about Iggy doing drugs?? :P

EvelynaKitty EvelynaKitty
10/15/14

Wow, I would've knew had guessed that Jo was the reason why they were having hallucinations. But I think that for suspense that you should've put Jo's part of him being evil at the WAAAY beginning of this story. It seemed like Jo's part and the figuring out of the reason behind the hallucinations was just way too easy for the characters and that they should've figure out the reason behind the hallucinations after they go to the mental hospital thing... Just my thoughts, so yea :) But nice reason why they were having hallucinations ;)

A Shruinger A Shruinger
10/15/14
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