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@EvelynaKitty
Ah, okay... So he's having hallucinations from the past then. Is that the right way to describe what you want Val to go through?
@A Shruinger
Well like in the summary, Sergei's retirement kind of opens him up for vulnerability, so I was thinking that his mind is possessed and now to set that up I was having the "home sickness" which is his friend Maria from childhood. But I don't want him being possessed satanically. However, I was thinking the Maria can haunt him, slip into his head and turn into Sergei, who is like, "you can't do this without me there" and so Val begins to fret and slip up on the ice...poor guy. :(
@EvelynaKitty
Yea, that'll be a good idea... ;)
Okay, so he's having visible hallucinations then in that case, right?
@A Shruinger
Okay...I'm not thinking of it as a "demon".....gosh, I'm not really sure...I guess it would just be like a "haunting thought"....not really a demon or like satanic possession. I can't think of what exactly I want actually.....I may go back and change it....cause I don't want it to be a demon, more like a "demon". If that makes sense.
Darn...I'll fix that real fast.... :D
Alright, so yea, it does work fine... But if someone can communicate to demons...then they are most likely demon possessed...and that's a VERY scary situation to be in...and to be around... Yea...just lettin' ya know that someone can't just talk to demons and be fine and then start freakin' out when the demon comes around...
Oh, and you made a mistake though on the last sentence--you put it in third person instead of first person! So close!!!!
OMG, I love this story, so of course I subscribed!! :D I noticed that you switched POV, since you usually do third person! I liked it in first person!!! Tbh, first person is my favorite POV to read and write in ;) Of course you got it from a dream! XDDD I only found one mistake: How long had I been sitting out here in the son? And yea! Keep on writin'! :)
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@A Shruinger
Not exactly, I'm going to go back over it here and try to figure out exactly what I want. He's not exactly getting possessed by the body, more so the mind....but I'm thinking of it as more of a conscious type thing. Like telepathy, only more realistic as the "devil on your shoulder" kind of thing. So when Val goes to play on the ice, only he can experience the voice in his head that sounds like Sergei. Does this make sense?
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