AAOOOSC!: The Mission - Comments

@lazyisscoreee
OMG THANK YOU SO MUCH YOU ARE AWESOME! :DDD I AM SO HAPPY THAT THIS WAS NOT CONFUSING AND THAT YOU ENJOYED IT SO MUCH! :DDDD READ MORE AAOOOSC! :DDDDD
I am so glad that my Toews character is actually better than the real Toews to you! :) Yay! :D
And I am also glad that you loved the ending! :DDD That was practically all improvised! XD Yes, ONE BIG HAPPY AND HAPPY AND HAPPY AND HAPPY FAMILY! :)
And I am SUPER DUPER glad that Sid makes you happy! :D
And the history of the NHL is important! Without it, where would the NHL be? ;)
Thank you reading and critiquing! :D I VERY MUCH APPRECIATE IT! :D
YAYAAYAAAAAY! :D *hugs you*

First, I must say that the "Bobrovsky would be jealous line" is best!!!!! :) :) :) :):)
Second, Toews in your story is the only only ONLY Toews I like, so thank you! XD
Third, Sid is so awesome & awesome & awesome & awesome & awesome & awesome & awesome! etc. etc. He's best! Whatever he says always makes me laugh & it's so adorable:) "Grrr" XD S'cute, Sid, s'cute!:)
Also, adding the a bit of the NHL history there, eh! That's fantastic!:)
Finally, you couldn't have ended the story in a better way. John was welcomed, Toews came to good terms with his powers & Jonas was so excited over John knowing his language! Awwww:) They were all in one big happy reunion & they were happy & happy & happy & happy & happy & happy & happy & happy. Evidently, Sid is my fave :D
Yayyy!!!! :D :D :D :D :D

THE ENDING IS PER-FECT *Leeroy voice* XD

I LOVE THIS STORY!!!!

@A Shruinger
lol "they are big" "they meet 1d" Those are very Geno sentences XD CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR EXISTENCE BEING ACKNOWLEDGED BY THE BEST AUSSIE PUNKS EVAAAA ;D XP XD :D :D :D

@lazyisscoreee
Yes! :))) "I best!" XD
Of course I have to fangirl over them, they are big!! They meet 1D!!! They are a famous band! :D THEY ACKNOWLEDGED ME AND WAVED TO ME!!! 8D

Comment on Iceburgh & the Gang: Yay! Fleury best! :D
And aww look at you having a fangirl moment over 5sos;) Lucky you, got noticed by 3/4...:) :) :)

@EvelynaKitty
I see that and I'm gonna email you my reply! :)

@A Shruinger
Wow, sorry this is taking so long....I'm gonna send you everything I have though via email. My main issues I have figured out where they are and what it is....and I have a lot of comments for you. I started at Ch. 26 and went to 30. I hope they aren't too horrible, but they are constructive and I hope will maybe be cleared up now. ;)

@EvelynaKitty
Thank you, thank you! :))) Wait, how does Nathan look funny? X( Hahaaa, yea, Toews, I had to make the facial expression that shows his feelings in the story XP
Yea, I can see how it can be confusing--it'll be good to reread the previous chapters to know what's going on because I want to know if everything here makes sense! XD Yup! I told you it'll be a great ending! :D
(29) 1. For that, I was just trying to say like what Toews was meaning was what he meant with his eyes... You get?
(30)1. Uh, they're in the EHP HQs! This chapter flows off from chapter 29! Is that not clear?
2. Hahahaa, no. I'm sorry, but no over-the-top Kazer in this series--they're just friends here :) And Nemo doesn't ruin anything! ;)
3. Hmmmm...I'll put dialogue tags on there since that's better Gorman and Sid and then Jonny (Quick) comes in :P
4. Yea, that might be a problem...but that's good that you changed it! ;) Come on, young man named John story here!!! ;))
5. I don't mind doing my homework actually--it makes me make sense outta what I learned in class! XD
6. Hahahaaa!!! XD I put in pizza because I wanted them to celebrate at Papa Crosby's! :D
7. Thaaaaaaank you! :))) It was my wallpaper for my iPad at one point! I love how they're both all RAW! and their powers are blasting out from their hands! X))) POWER!!!! YESSSS!!!! And now you know how Toews's ergokinetic power looks like! ;)
8. Thank you, it's suppose to be happy! And tbh, it was hard ending it! 8(((
9. What do you mean by the last chapter: the bonus scene or chapter 30? Because chapter 30 is necessary of course for settling all the disputes that came in during the story. And the bonus scene tells the readers what happened to Jimmy and sets up for the future AAOOOSC! stories ;)
Yup, it's Howard Time!! 8OOOO
Errrrrr...great idea, but I don't think it'll work in AAOOOSC! terms...because of the power player stuff and that one player from each team has the team powers and if your and my universe cross, then no, it'll not turn out well because it wouldn't match... You get why I'm rejecting this? But I'm sorry :P
Yayayaaaay! :DDD Thank! :) Cliffhanger will end in the last AAOOOSC! story (the 10th one)! XD

AH JIMMY HOWARD!!!! THE VENOM GUY WHO FOUGHT BEN SMITH!!!! XPPPP Yes, Red Wings are evil!! Very, very evil! Haha! XP
I was thinking, and feel free to say no to this, but what if me and you team up and I can have Zvezda, Arrow Hawk, Sabrebow and Chaos get introduced to the GHP and your guys! And they all have to fight someone...???? Like a crossover thing? Obviously I can't have CB, Showtime, or any of those, but those four I can, since they aren't in your story. ;)
Anyway, can't wait until Universe now!! Yay!!!! Great cliffhanger ending!! ;)

And here's my notes for Ch. 31:
1. Tommy then enters the headquarters in his hologram-self; he stops to look at the hugging good guys. "Wow, that's a lot of hugs in one! Bobrovsky would be jealous!” - Weren’t they just…I’m getting a setting confusion. Are they inside or outside? I thought they were outside…can you throw in some hints if they were inside, cause I thought they were outside?
2. Yay Kazer moment! I read it and I was like, “Kiss him! Kiss him!” And then Nemo had to ruin it by showing up…. :(
3. Actually, this whole part is flummoxing me:
Tommy then enters the headquarters in his hologram-self; he stops to look at the hugging good guys. "Wow, that's a lot of hugs in one! Bobrovsky would be jealous!"
"Nemo's alive!!" Sidney exclaims, looking at the hologram-like human.
"Well, we hope he's alive!"
"But he was gone for a while!"
"That's because him himself, Gorman, he was gone for a while," Jonathan tells Sidney.
"Ohhhh!”
4. John wanting to be in the GHP…uh oh, I did that with Chaos (Namestnikov). He’s frustrated that he wasn’t included with the Hockey Avengers. XP But I’m not gonna have him get into the group…In fact he’ll be fine being solitary. :P
5. I take it you want a robot to do your homework? XP That’d be nice.
6. Whoa…Sid and I are like thinking the same man. I want Pizza for lunch too!! XP
7. Love the edit of Tavy and Jonny!! :P
8. Great ending chapter.
9. I'm wondering, was the last chapter necessary? I don't mean to sound mean or if you really like that, but is it? Cause its just another little detour before he gets back?? I'm not sure it's necessary to the plot though...It's like me throwing in a random sex scene with Jonny and Kaner into -say- Haunting Hallucinations. XP Just let me know its importance and then I'll be able to understand. ;)
I'll probably re-read the last 5 chapters again or so, cause I got super lost and confused. I'll see if that does anything. ;)

OMG! I love the drawings and the new cover image thing!! Great job! Nathan looks the funniest...or well I guess "coolest" haha! And I love Jonny's! Classic Jonny face (Jonny = Toews for me.)
This one was a little difficult with the weird reality, but I liked it...Kaner and Tazer friends for life!! But Kaner would ALWAYS remember Jonny as his friend!! ALWAYS!! XPP They're too bonded together and Kaner's gonna return on Jonny's b-day!! :)
Okay...anyway...uh, I just got one thing for this chapter (Ch. 30):
1. Toews gazes at him with meaning in his eyes. "Yes! You know that, right?” - What does this mean? What do you mean by "meaning in his eyes" I don't think I've heard of having "meaning" in your eyes. :P

@EvelynaKitty
Okay, good! :))) I was planning this story before I even watched the movie!
It was sad at some parts, and you can kinda consider it complex with what the characters talk about since they're really smart, but it's understandable, like the plot and what's going on ;)

@A Shruinger
I didn't mean it to sound like it was, no compared to that, this is mild. :)
Was it good or sad or complex or what? Oh, I guess I'll find out for myself. XP

@EvelynaKitty
No, this isn't like Days of Future Past at all!
2. You are very welcome! :)
Yea, watch the movie! :D It's awesome, but I just have an overload from it and I'm trying to recover from it still... 8P

@A Shruinger
But it's fine. A lot is okay, as long as it isn't like DOFP a lot. XP
2. Yay! Thank you so much!!!! :D
Haha, I'm gonna attempt to watch Big Hero 6 I think. But after I watch Whiplash and Maleficent!! :)

@EvelynaKitty
Okay, good! But yea, I can see how it's a lot! :P
1. It's fine :)
2. Okay, since you really want me to reintroduce it back, I put Gorman saying the name of the bracelet: teleportation bracelet. I hope that solves the problem! :P
3. Alright, at least the rest is fine! Now I know to never go on an X-men marathon! Don't worry, I'm Big Hero 6-ed out! 8PPPP I watched it SOOOO many times, even in French! XD
Good, good! :)

@A Shruinger
Okay, I re-read it and yeah. It's okay. But it is still a lot. :) Yeah, I don't care about basketball. XP
1. Okay! ;) I might have missed it. My bad.
2. Okay, well this is one of those cases, where it would be nice to reintroduce this to the reader. Alright? It's the same thing with me, like let's say with Flight, for the sequel Red Wing and Canuck come back, I should reintroduce who they are, because maybe someone people have forgotten or - if they are like this - will not have read Flight, but like Arrow Hawk better. Also, it's the same with the leader, Vanek, because Vanek was in Flight. :) Just explain the bracelets for those of us who have forgotten, okay? Thanks.
3. Alright...alright, it's fine, it's fine. I think I was just X-Men-d out. lol XP I looked at it again just now and it's fine. Just fix the bracelet thing. ;)
Yeah....but the Hawks beat Byfuglien (it's not the Jets, just Byfuglien) and the Bs won with Pasta and Spoons (this will be a fun bromance if it becomes such) and the Stars won!! Yay!! Ending the week on a positive! ;)

@EvelynaKitty
Yea, I could see that! XDD But yea, things HAD got a whole lot weirder, trust me. Even in the next chapter, the madness is gonna continue :P But at the end, all will be fine :) Maybe reread this again tomorrow with a clear mind and see if sense is made here ;)
Ewwww, no, no Duke! XPP Go Badgers!!! They got like the best girls hockey team! ;)))
1. I did put that translation in!!! It's, Yes. And you guys better not mess with them
2. Well, I informed the reader a while back ago about teleportation bracelets...back in AAOOOSC! Playoffs...remember?
3. Because a bunch DID happen! All will be clarified in the next chapter ;) I was meaning to leave the reader full of confusion and for that chapter to be sped up ;) Trust me ;)
Awwwwww....we lost 8( At least we got a point :P