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@EvelynaKitty
2. Good, good! :)
3. Oh, so like spitted versus spat...okay, it's good to know that it can go both ways! :D Yay! :D
@A Shruinger
2. Alright. Thanks. Hmm...I understand know.
4. Okay, I talked to my mom and it's like spit and spitted. Spitted it the right word, but some writers can use spit. So with let and letted, many - including me - use let but letted is okay, as long as it is a word. So, I guess it's fine. ;) I'm just not used to it, but if you want to use it, that's fine. :)
@EvelynaKitty
2. Nope, they didn't come in until the 1920s from what I read on here. And this is where I got the first teams in the NHL. I did keynote about Gorman and the beginnings of the NHL for a school project, so I know what I'm talking about ;)
3. :)
4. No, it would've said on the app that it's a slang word but it said nothing about that, so it must be correct; to make sure that letted is a word, I put 'letted' in the dictionary app and I also checked on my iPad's dictionary and it recongized it as a word! Sounds weird, sounds bad, but it happens sometimes in English, right? But yea, you can check on that yourself if you're not convinced that it's an actual word ;)
@A Shruinger
Yeah...and annoying....
2. Uh....Boston wasn't apart of that? I always though Boston was the oldest team and then Montreal, Toronto, Chicago...etc....is there an article or site you have that has the history for me? I'm not saying you're wrong, but I might have heard the history wrong. Whenever the Bruins play, they always mention it as being the oldest team in the league.
3. Oh good. ;)
4. Yeah...okay, I think I got it. "Letted" is a word, however I think that in terms of grammar and writing, the correct way is to say "let". "Letted" might be like a slang word. I tried to type in "Is letted a word" and nothing came up. Also, I've never read a book or seen "letted" as a word. Yes, it may be in the dictionary, but I don't think it is an actual word used in writing. I just see "let", however I can ask my mother, grandmother and other people about it. But, though it is a word in the dictionary, I don't think it is used in serious writing. ;) I'll confirm for you though.
@EvelynaKitty
Ah, okay! But PK's really cool off ice--he's so funny! XDDD
1. Yup! Reader's must know what they're readin' now, eh?
2. You're naming somewhat of the Original Six, which came about in 1942--here, it's about the start of the NHL, the beginnings, the baby years of the NHL: early 1918, not even when the NHL's a year old (the NHL came about in late Nov 1917)! But yea, the NHL started with only Canadian teams, but then Gorman invested in American teams and yadadada, history I can talk to you about for hours! ;)
3. I found it and fixed it! Thanks! :D
4. I know it does sound weird, but it's true. NOW 'putted' and 'cutted' AREN'T words at all ('putted' is, but it's not the past tense for 'put', it's a golf term :P). But letted is definitely a word and I showed you proof via email ;)
5-6. :D
Thanks! :)))
@A Shruinger
That's his problem...actually...that's Therrien's problem. He's the villain. He corrupts hockey players on the ice. Stay away from Kazer, you jerk!
1. Thanks.
2. Ew...I thought Boston was apart of those though. I thought it was always Boston, Chicago, Ottawa, Montreal and Toronto.
3. Uh, it's toward the middle, before the word letted. ;)
4. I'm still not sure....it just doesn't read right and it sounds really really weird...
5. Okay. Cool.
6. Haha, okay. ;)
Awesome fixes!
@EvelynaKitty
I know... But he's so cool off the ice! :PPP
1. I added in the translation in the story!
2. I know! But hey, those were the first teams in the NHL!
3. Where is that in this chapter? I couldn't find it :P
4. LETTED IS A WORD!!!!
5. Yea, you are right that Toews did introduce himself in the chapter, but he didn't introduce himself to Tommy. I fixed that as well by changing Toews's question :P
6. I know and it's so cool because he's HUMAN!!! HE'S ACTUALLY HUMAN IN THIS CHAPTER! :DDDD Unfortunately, I can't use any colour descriptions of Gorman because all of his pics are in black and white XD
TOLD YOU PK'S A JERK!!!!!!! HATE MONTREAL!!!! STUPID, STUPID HABS!!
Anyway, notes for this: (In order of chapter)
1. "Qui es-tu?” - This needs a translation
2. That’s a nasty and disturbing NHL…NOOOO!!!! Yuck! Toronto, Montreal and Ottawa…ewwwwww
3. "I have a feel what is happening.” should be, "I have a feeling what is happening.” (or maybe say I have a feeling about what is going on.)
4. The man letted Toews sit in the passenger's seat while the man took the driver's seat. (letted should be let) ;)
5. Oh, hey, okay so I thought Jonny already introduced himself above in the chapter….This is the one major part and let me know if you need me to further explain this with the part where you mention it. He says it in French. So this doesn’t make sense: "Do you even know my name?" Toews asked with narrowed eyes.
"No, I do not know, but I know that someone will time travel back into this time, and that would be the right hand ruler of the NHL, which is you: the one who has the powers of the NHL.”And this too:
"Nicknames are just nicknames, but still, I am begging you, Captain Serious, that you must accept the fact that you have powers because you do. And what we are going to do later on requires you to use your powers."
"I'm sorry, but I won't do that." Toews looked at him. "And my name's Jonathan Toews.
6. GORMAN!!!!!! HE’S BACK!!!! :) (Nothing wrong here, I just was a little shocked and happy)
@EvelynaKitty
Good, good! :)
Yay! :DD Same here, I'm thankful for your help as well! :DDD
;)
NO!!! Not in my stories, that is! I was just saying that Kaner is like Hawkeye in past AAOOOSC! stories and is going to continue to be like him in future AAOOOSC! stories! XDDD No, no, I'm not planning for Tyler to be in AAOOOSC! so far...but maybe he might be in one... Maybe...
@A Shruinger
I got it this time. :P
Thanks, she is an awesome grandma. I'm thankful for her help and for yours! :)
Hawkeye!! <3 Hawkeye's my fave (cause Val and Zady) XP
Wait, Tyler Seguin's gonna be in future stories like Black Widow???? XPPPP
@EvelynaKitty
It's fine! :P
Oh goodness...
Awww! :))) Your grandma's just so awesome! :D
Yup! :DDD
You're welcome, just doing my job of clearing things out for my readers! ;)
Thanks! 8))))
@EvelynaKitty
Hahaa! See, Tazer is starting to be buddies with Kaner again, just like what I told you! :D
Yea, well of course Patrick is like hawkeye--because of the Blackhawks powers he has in AAOOOSC! :D Not in this story, but in past stories and later stories, yea ;)
@A Shruinger
Oh fudge, I forget to respond to the last comment! :P
Haha I'm kidding, Nichy's a baby - Bacon's baby - Baby Russian!! Woo!
Yup!
I told her and she says, "thank you and anytime" ;)
Happy Kazer Ending!! Yay!!
Ah, right. Sorry, still learning some of these powers here. :P Thanks for reminding and explaining that to me. ;)
Haha. You're welcome. It's true though ;)
"NOOOO!!!" Toews screams, rushing into the middle of the room.
*gasps*
KAZER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
<3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 XPPPPPPPPP XDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD
Since I watched the Avengers movie, now I think of Patrick like Hawkeye...but Hawkeye is Val/Zady.... But Tyler Seguin is always Black Widow XPP
@EvelynaKitty
Sorry, that's my bad for not hitting the reply button :P No, Sid stays with Geno, not Val. And yes, Geno would say that that isn't score ;)
Okay, yea get that stuff outta your system! It'll be nice!
Yes, your grandma is very helpful! :D You can tell her that I told her that! :DDD
Yay! :DDD See, Toews is not gonna hate on Kane forever! Happy ending!!!
Uh, didn't you hear the story about a young boy named John and the story about a young man named John? Come on, you can't forget about those amazing stories!!! John is the weather guy--the power player for the Islanders! John doesn't only have atmokinesis, but he also has atmogenesis, which weather generation. So that means that he has the ability to generate weather elements, giving him the ability to generate water since water is rain and rain is a weather element. No, John is not immune to Ben's lightning--Ben's lightning is different than John's since John's has a different colour of lightning since it looks like the exact lightning you'd see in the sky while Ben's lightning is more supernatural with the blue outlines; John's only immune to regular, natural lightning, like his own and the weather's not supernatural lightning, like Ben's lightning. Anyways, I put in that chapter that John felt pain has the lightning from Ben got to him through Ben's omnidirectional electric waves. John's smart--he knows his powers even though he hasn't used them the way he used them in this chapter in a while; he can't forget how to use them ;)
Awww, thank you, thank you! :))) *pictures self bowing since she's sitting in the car and doesn't feel like moving XDDD*
Oh! I didn't realize that you'd responded to my comment, oops...
Well, sorry, I just like to be dramatic, it's the theatre lover in me. XP
Haha, Sid's like Nichy in this. Sid should be friends with Nichy....would that make Malky jealous though? XP
Oh trust me, I'm going completely woman with them in Ever Ever After to get it out of my system, but in the others Tyler and Kaner are men. Granted Kaner or Tyler might call for help, but they will be much stronger. I mean Kaner's allowed to call for Jonny to come to his rescue, it happens. :) Yeah, and I take her guidance and lessons and apply them and try to help others out. A lot of the "proper language" or "proper English" just comes through learning, but some grammar-type stuff I am still learning and working on. But thanks. I'm happy to help you out like she helps me out! :)
As for the new chapter comments:
"Patrick, it was Patrick, he was fighting, fighting with his weird powers; then that guy, Kari, yea Kari, stuck him and killed him!" He snap his head back up, starting at the dark with fear. "Oh my goodness, it just might happen. He might die. No, no, I gotta help him, try to get him out of this. Yes, I gotta go, gotta go!"
YES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! KAZER TIME!!!!!! <3 <3 <3 <3 :)
Go to him Jonny, go! :D
Haha, um...I totally must have forgotten, but did you ever mention John Tavares having powers before? He's the weather guy right? I'm a little confused with all the water being apart of the "Atmokinesis" and Bishop has the power of the Lightning....so couldn't Tavy be immune, since lightning is apart of weather, which is probably apart of Atmokinesis? And I don't know if Tavy ever used his powers much before, so I'd think he'd be a little more rusty...but maybe not. I don't know.
I like the length of the chapter, man you are good with battle scenes! :)
Meeeehhhh... :P
Hey, hey, hey, he's the Master now, he's gotta take care of the GHP! And he's just friends with Tazer--he can have more than one friend! Calm down, calm down...he's just going through a hard time, that's all...
Thanks :) Well, like what I said, the GHP are going through a hard time, so Sid's pretty sad and when he's sad, he is kinda more...kiddish. Yea.
Yup, I agree with your grandma! ;) And I hope that also goes with Tyler and Kaner as well :P Sorry, sorry, but yea... But it's so cool that you have a grandma that actaully helps you write! Or just a family member in general! With me, it's just me :P
Sorry...hate the Habs too!! :P
BAD PATRICK!! NO!! YOU CARE MORE FOR JONNY THAN NEMO!!!! Grrrr!!!! SCREW YOU KANER FOR CHEATING ON JONNY LIKE THAT!!!! >:(
Anyway....
Awwww, nice chapter, you make Sid so baby-like...
So my grandmother called me out saying that I made Jonathan too girly actually...wow...I guess I need to beef up the men, eh? Well, luckily I can with the fights!!!! Yay! :P
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What the...hell....???? What the hell just happened? I'm sorry, I'm just, wow, my brain cannot comprehend all of this "time traveling" stuff today. Darn you for the cliffhanger though. Ugh!
My dad wants Duke to win, but me, GO HAWKS, STARS, LIGHTNING, AVS, B's, DUCKS AND ISLES AND NON-BASKETBALL STUFF, CAUSE I DON'T CARE!!!!!!!!!! XPPPP
Anyway, here's what I got:
1. "Oui," Toews replies standing up with a serious look. "Et vous les gars mieux ne plaisante pas avec eux.” - What does Jonny say here?
2. "Whoa, I didn't know you can teleport through bracelets!" Toews exclaims.
"Yup." Tommy spins the leather watch-like bracelet that is wrapped around his wrist. "It's an invention of mine based from the powers of the Cup... Luckily, it has no connection to it.” - With this, can you hint at the bracelets being on them earlier, I was like, “whoa they have bracelets now.” It was a little sudden to me.
3. Toward the end, it felt like a bunch happened and I think that - I get you want the Cup to disappear temp. - but that whole scene felt really really speedy and quick. I'm not sure, but to me the pacing could be looked at a little bit more. :)
Hope this helps. I feel a ton more knowledgable on the powers though ;) Thanks X-Men and Avengers and Marvel.
3/30/15